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(Message started by: tkc1989 on Jun 29^th, 2006, 3:01am)

Title: Some of my lyrics
Post by tkc1989 on Jun 29^th, 2006, 3:01am

I attempt to write songs, but as yet I havent recorded much but that should change in the near future hopefully. Here are a couple of recent songs...

'My Inspiration'

I'm so glad I've found you
Never thought this day would come
Where you fill the dark around you
Because you shine like the sun

And how do we...

Keep strong,
And hold on?
'Cause you're my inspiration
And you're why I wrote this song
Because you and I belong

And my every day is simple
Now that you're here with me
'Cause you take away the pain I feel
Yeah you kill my misery

So please won't you...

Hold on,
And keep strong?
And we'll find our destination
We'll be home before too long

So keep on
And keep strong
'Cause you're my inspiration
And you're why I'm holding on
You're why I'm holding on
Yeah you're why I'm holding on
Just say you're holding on

this next one is about one of my closest friends who i kinda fell in love with and she said she felt the same yadadada etc etc but nothing happened....

'You'

You act like I�m a sin
You play against this soul within
You act like I was your �everything�
But for a while

But now I�m done
You stole the light from my sun
You stole away the everything
That made me smile

But you�ll never be without me
�Cause you may be the one I need
No you�ll never be without me
But I just need some time to breathe

You say you�re lost
Try to think but I�m at a loss
It�s too hard to believe anything
That you may say

But you�ll never be without me
�Cause you may be the one I need
No you�ll never be without me
But I just need some time to breathe

You led me on into destruction
You led me on and so I fell
You led me on with your seduction
You made me blind so I couldn�t tell

And you�ll never be without me
�Cause you may be the one I need
No you�ll never be without me
But I just need some time to breathe

Title: Re: Some of my lyrics
Post by Shannon on Jun 29^th, 2006, 10:16am

You should definitely record those songs. Very beautiful lyrics. I would love to be a songwriter but that's just not my talent. You've definitely got the talent for songwriting. Are you in a band or do you play any instruments?

Title: Re: Some of my lyrics
Post by carlyn on Jun 29^th, 2006, 11:50am

Those lyrics are really good! Do you have music written for them too?

Title: Re: Some of my lyrics
Post by tkc1989 on Jun 29^th, 2006, 12:37pm

hey thanks. I'm not in a band but i play guitar, mainly acoustic, i can play bass and i can get by on drums and piano. And yeah i have music for those songs, I'll get round to recording them soon hopefully :D

Title: Re: Some of my lyrics
Post by Dream of Goo on Jul 16^th, 2006, 1:09pm

Beautiful lyrics. I like writing lyrics too but yours is so much more professional.
They both can relate to what i feel now about someone with the first one and how i could feel if i don't say the right words with the second song. Cool. Keep writing.

Title: Re: Some of my lyrics
Post by tkc1989 on Jul 16^th, 2006, 3:58pm

Hey thanks :D I'd love to see some of your stuff if you fancy posting any :)

Title: Re: Some of my lyrics
Post by Christian on Jul 20^th, 2006, 4:06am

I'll be as honest as I can.

The first one is decent as far as love songs go. My favourite part is the last line, that little bit of doubt thrown in. The rest feels pretty standard, what you'd hear from your everyday vanilla pop band. Shoot higher than that though. You're only describing the feeling, something people have been doing for centuries. Make it special by conveying why she's so special to you. How does she take away your pain? How does she comfort you? How does she inspire you? To make a love song special, tell us why she's so special. Of course, this is just my opinion. :P

Now, the second one I feel is definitely the stronger of the two. I get a lot more feeling from it. The words convey something a lot stronger. I feel your frustration and the feeling of betrayal you're carrying. It feels really genuine.

Title: Re: Some of my lyrics
Post by tkc1989 on Jul 28^th, 2006, 7:54am

Thanks for the crit Christian, I definitely know what you mean, my songs are generally pretty vague and standard but I've only been writing for about a year so I'm still progressing. I'm focussing more on the song as a whole with music etc atm though just trying to finish more songs as I tend to leave most of them half finished.